Thanks for the enthusiasm last week! This is the part in The Seven Noble Knights of Lara after the inciting incident that could be pretty dull if not written properly. I'm hugely thankful for your feedback and comments! This segment follows on directly after last week's.
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Doña Lambra’s muscles tensed when doña Sancha and her sons appeared with their tutor Muño Salido, approaching in a procession that recalled the funeral of the day before. Lambra focused her energy on wiping away new tears and twisting her braid in her hand as she waited for them to arrive. Doña Sancha stayed several paces away and the men all stayed behind her. Lambra set her jaw, thinking that any normal person would have come up and clasped her hands in concern for her wellbeing.
“We’re here to express our condolences once again,” Sancha said across the space between them.
The young knights and their tutor made sweeping bows.
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Loved the visual of her twisting her braid waiting.
ReplyDeleteI have to read this whole book! These teasers are making me crazy with want!
ReplyDeleteThanks, D'Ann! When I finish it, and it gets published, I'll send you an advance review copy... ;)
DeleteSomehow I think forgiveness is not on the table just yet. And I agree with D'Ann. I want to read the whole thing! For the time being, however, a great six. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat six, the part about twisting her braid in her hand is a great visual.
ReplyDeleteNice visuals (the braid twisting and the space).
ReplyDeleteConsidering the space and positioning I'd have to say, Not Yet on the forgiveness.
Want more! :)
Again you paint a wonderful picture. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written visuals, love the snippets over the weeks.
ReplyDeleteClearly, Dona Lambra is not pleased. I'm not so sure all is forgiven. Great six!
ReplyDeleteVery regal scene with some deep emotion. I like the flow.
ReplyDeleteAny normal person? That's priceless. Says exactly how she's feeling. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat description. You really get a sense that she just wants a hug, instead of all this formality.
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