Subscribe to Jessica's exclusive newsletter

Subscribe to Jessica's newsletter

* indicates required

Sunday, July 24, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday: Death at the Wedding and Its Consequences

These six come directly after the six from last week. Doña Lambra's about to hold forth at her nephew Gonzalo:

*  *  *


Through her tears, she exclaimed, “He was my cousin. He won the prize. Never before has a bride been so dishonored at her own wedding! Ruy Blásquez will repay this betrayal!”
Doña Sancha let go of Gonzalo’s arm to wipe at the tears coming down her own cheeks and plead with Lambra. “Oh, dear sister-in-law, he didn’t mean to do it.”


*  *  *

Thanks so much for stopping by and for whatever insight you wish to share here. I really appreciated the encouragement last week! What an amazing boost that was! The other six sentences for this amazing Sunday jaunt are here.

34 comments:

  1. Oh dear, this tragedy is shaping up nicely. Love the family conflict.

    ReplyDelete
  2. I agree with Liz. It is coming together very well

    ReplyDelete
  3. Jessica, I am loving this story. Thank you for another great snippet.

    ReplyDelete
  4. "Never before has a bride been so dishonored at her own wedding! Ruy Blásquez will repay this betrayal!" The language is indicative of the time and setting of the story. Well done!

    ReplyDelete
  5. This story just draws you deeper and deeper into it. Excellent six. Can't wait for more!

    ReplyDelete
  6. So terrible! This wedding is such a mess, but the snippets are awesome!

    ReplyDelete
  7. I feel for these people. You've done such a great job of creating the period and place. Another wonderful six!

    ReplyDelete
  8. My first visit here, and your snippet certainly held my attention.

    ReplyDelete
  9. Oh! There's gonna be hell to pay!

    ReplyDelete
  10. Somebody's in trouble! Feisty six!

    ReplyDelete
  11. fantastic descriptions and choreography, I could totally picture this scene -- fab six! As each week passes, I'm enjoying hearing more and more from this story!

    ReplyDelete
  12. Oh the poor bride. Such a great setup for family conflict. Great six. Bonni Sansom

    ReplyDelete
  13. Great emotion. I feel for the bride. Great six.

    ReplyDelete
  14. I could picture them perectly.

    ReplyDelete
  15. Bit self-centered, that girl. (I read the death scene & had a thought about adding the sound of his bones crushing. I'd leave it out, if that's your instinct, but point to that lack of sound to heighten the horror of the scene. So, no one present hears the sound of his crushing bones, but her piercing scream seems all the more shocking and pulls them all into the reality of what just happened.) :) Hope that helps.

    ReplyDelete
  16. I can picture exactly what was happening - great six!

    ReplyDelete
  17. This story is always so emotional! Good six

    ReplyDelete
  18. Love the emotion

    ReplyDelete
  19. ...somehow, I don't think that's an idle threat...

    ReplyDelete
  20. Great, great six. Very captivating.

    ReplyDelete
  21. Her wedding will certainly be memorable! But for all the wrong reasons. Excellent six.

    ReplyDelete
  22. You've brought the mood of the period to life so well!

    ReplyDelete
  23. Great scene with lots of emotion and good description. I enjoy your posts every week. Consistently good writing.

    ReplyDelete
  24. Each and every time I catch your snippets you never fail to draw me in. This story keeps getting better and better. Great job in capturing the period.

    ReplyDelete
  25. Sounds like things are about to get really ugly. I agree with readmoore.com - your dialogue seems perfectly suited to the historical setting. That's really important as anachronisms can really pull a reader out of the story. I've noticed your language and phrasing are always great at drawing the reader into the historical setting. Good job!

    ReplyDelete
  26. Lots of good conflict here. Great!

    ReplyDelete
  27. She will make sure he is avenged! Great snippet!

    ReplyDelete
  28. 'he didn't mean to do it?!' I hope he does pay!

    ReplyDelete
  29. I love how this is coming together - nice six!

    ReplyDelete