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Through her tears, she exclaimed, “He was my cousin. He won the prize. Never before has a bride been so dishonored at her own wedding! Ruy Blásquez will repay this betrayal!”
Doña Sancha let go of Gonzalo’s arm to wipe at the tears coming down her own cheeks and plead with Lambra. “Oh, dear sister-in-law, he didn’t mean to do it.”
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Thanks so much for stopping by and for whatever insight you wish to share here. I really appreciated the encouragement last week! What an amazing boost that was! The other six sentences for this amazing Sunday jaunt are here.
Oh dear, this tragedy is shaping up nicely. Love the family conflict.
ReplyDeleteI can picture this well. :)
ReplyDeleteI agree with Liz. It is coming together very well
ReplyDeleteJessica, I am loving this story. Thank you for another great snippet.
ReplyDelete"Never before has a bride been so dishonored at her own wedding! Ruy Blásquez will repay this betrayal!" The language is indicative of the time and setting of the story. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThis story just draws you deeper and deeper into it. Excellent six. Can't wait for more!
ReplyDeleteSo terrible! This wedding is such a mess, but the snippets are awesome!
ReplyDeleteI feel for these people. You've done such a great job of creating the period and place. Another wonderful six!
ReplyDeleteMy first visit here, and your snippet certainly held my attention.
ReplyDeleteI'm so loving this story!
ReplyDeleteOh! There's gonna be hell to pay!
ReplyDeleteSomebody's in trouble! Feisty six!
ReplyDeletefantastic descriptions and choreography, I could totally picture this scene -- fab six! As each week passes, I'm enjoying hearing more and more from this story!
ReplyDeleteOh the poor bride. Such a great setup for family conflict. Great six. Bonni Sansom
ReplyDeleteGreat emotion. I feel for the bride. Great six.
ReplyDeleteI could picture them perectly.
ReplyDeleteBit self-centered, that girl. (I read the death scene & had a thought about adding the sound of his bones crushing. I'd leave it out, if that's your instinct, but point to that lack of sound to heighten the horror of the scene. So, no one present hears the sound of his crushing bones, but her piercing scream seems all the more shocking and pulls them all into the reality of what just happened.) :) Hope that helps.
ReplyDeleteI can picture exactly what was happening - great six!
ReplyDeleteVery emotional! Great six.
ReplyDeleteThis story is always so emotional! Good six
ReplyDeleteLove the emotion
ReplyDelete...somehow, I don't think that's an idle threat...
ReplyDeleteGreat, great six. Very captivating.
ReplyDeleteHer wedding will certainly be memorable! But for all the wrong reasons. Excellent six.
ReplyDeleteYou've brought the mood of the period to life so well!
ReplyDeleteGreat scene with lots of emotion and good description. I enjoy your posts every week. Consistently good writing.
ReplyDeleteEach and every time I catch your snippets you never fail to draw me in. This story keeps getting better and better. Great job in capturing the period.
ReplyDeleteSounds like things are about to get really ugly. I agree with readmoore.com - your dialogue seems perfectly suited to the historical setting. That's really important as anachronisms can really pull a reader out of the story. I've noticed your language and phrasing are always great at drawing the reader into the historical setting. Good job!
ReplyDeleteAn emotional scene. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteLots of good conflict here. Great!
ReplyDeleteGood conflict and emotion. Great!
ReplyDeleteShe will make sure he is avenged! Great snippet!
ReplyDelete'he didn't mean to do it?!' I hope he does pay!
ReplyDeleteI love how this is coming together - nice six!
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